Throughout the course, I have learned many things, regarding on how to write an essay, and have been able to reflect upon the criticism I have received from Mat onto my work. During my Personal Narrative, we were instructed to write a Shitty First Draft. This would be the first time I have written one so I was unsure how this would turn out. After finishing the Shitty First Draft and writing out my Revised Draft, I was impressed by how many ideas I kept from my Shitty First Draft and implemented it into my Revised Draft which then carried out into my Final Draft. Also after meeting with Mat over my Personal Narrative Revised Draft, I was thankful since he showed me my flaws and how I could improve my essay as I was inconsistent with providing details throughout my story, I had to incorporate more of the "show don't tell" aspects and that would make the story more vivid and make the reader feel more included in the story. Once I was provided with the criticism, after the conference I went directly to work to create my Final Draft of my Personal Narrative which allowed me to develop a more vivid and detailed narrative that had more examples of events that occurred so that the reader could picture the situations more clearly.
When it came to the Inquiry Project I was unsure of how to discuss the FSU Men’s Waterpolo team without diverging completely into Waterpolo and solely discussing the team and only key parts to the sport which led to my information not being presented in the most proper way. I also encountered a troubling situation on exactly which text to choose from and how to talk about it. I was unsure of how I was going to discuss their Instagram page and how far in-depth I should go when discussing their pictures, so I decided to discuss it for only to a small degree and only briefly describe the general idea of a majority of their pictures instead of picking a specific one. After meeting with Mat, I learned that my organization skills of how I presented the information when I was discussing the community profile, was not exactly proper, which was how I felt too, and he helped me figure out ways to restructure and insert certain sentences or paragraphs into other places, which would lead to a better flow of information. For example instead of presenting information about the special Waterpolo ball after discussing how the team practices, I should place it where I am discussing specific aspects of the sports, which makes tons of sense and I don't know why I thought to put it elsewhere. Mat also cleared up the way I should discuss my text, which instead of discussing the general Instagram page, I should provide and discuss three specific pictures from the FSU Men’s Waterpolo team Instagram.
For my third and final project, I created an Instagram for my podcast as one of my genres in our two genre project. On my Instagram, creatively named Nico’s Show, I created a profile picture with the name of the podcast being the dominant feature. I also created a picture for my first post that resembled the individual who I interviewed playing Waterpolo. This post advertised my Soundcloud, which would be my second genre. My Soundcloud featured the edited version of my podcast and the nonedited hour-long version of my podcast. The edited one featured music and clips from the interview discussing the FSU Men’s Waterpolo team. When listening and observing my classmates projects and my own, I discovered ways to improve the project I had initially completed. First I heard that my sound was too low for my podcast, resulting in a hard time hearing it unless you were wearing headphones or were close to where the sound was coming from. Another aspect I learned was that I could've, and arguably should've, added more humor to my project with memes and puns as it felt too serious and too bland unless you listened to the unedited hour-long version.
Over the course of this class, I have become a better writer because of the conferences we had with Mat and with the observation of my peers. This class has not only provided me with a new skill to use when writing, the Shitty First Draft technique but has overall made me a better writer as it provided me with criticism to reflect on so that I could apply it into a revised essay.
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